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Thanks woops do ya reckon I should switch life goals and spend the next few years writing a book length epic poem on von Richthofen I been reading his Wikipedia
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WashYourHands

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I love this anecdote of his about Fergie,

“It was Tottenham at home. I thought please don’t go on about Tottenham, we all know what Tottenham is about, they are nice and tidy but we’ll fucking do them. He came in and said: ‘Lads, it’s Tottenham’, and that was it. Brilliant.”
 

luka

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Douai, Messines,
returning now to Marcke living
in the château of the occupied,
playing with the occupant,

Giving the owner a
pretense of power exercised in
kidnapped furniture and
walled-off wings.

Ricky accumulates trophies
in the foyer and
up the stairs, under the desk
of the stenographer discreetly
buttoning her collar.
Critique this verse @luka gimme aural feedback the cadence the sound of the words the images I don't know how to tell good poetry from bad in any rigorous way
Too flat
 
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Try and get that sense of being always on your toes
Pivot more. modulate the length of the line more.
If you are going to be arch, be arch. Be a smirking courtier
What's a good example of something always on its toes
 
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