Very short poems you like

woops

is not like other people
The wounded cow lay down,
trees and streams climbing over its horns.
Its muzzle bled in the sky...

Tell the roots
and that child sharpening his knife
now they can eat the cow.

Above them, lights
and jugulars turn pale.
Four cloven hoofs tremble in the air...
I dunno maybe it sounds gd in Spanish
 

Benny B

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Could you run a knife across the throat of a beautiful cow so that the circle of life may continue, woops?
 

woops

is not like other people
Could you run a knife across the throat of a beautiful cow so that the circle of life may continue, woops?
No doubt while wearing special trousers & the cow's already been speared half to death in the blaze of noon, a redemptive enactment of a ritual as old as time etc
 

Benny B

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Pah, what I see is a refusal to meet the poem on its own terms, namely OTT poems about DEATH that puts the knife in the reader's hands. Blood all over the place.
 

Benny B

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'Emotional' poems can be a bit wet, I agree, but there's nothing wrong with putting a bit of blood and guts into it
 

Benny B

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My partner writes poems on WhatsApp and just sends them to me to save them, hardly ever writes them down. She just sent me this which she composed on the way to the supermarket and I like it a lot.

Vivir sin beber

Beber sin vivir, cuando bebo vivo? Cuando vivo bebo?
Cuando veo el barril, bebo vino, vivo.
 

yyaldrin

in je ogen waait de wind
this is my guess of what it could mean (i have zero spanish knowledge)

to celebrate without trembling

tremble without celebrating, how many trembling celebrations? how many lives trembling.
how much is the barrel, the trembling barrel of wine, live.
 

Benny B

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No, I don't think there's any 'tremblings' involved (or maybe there is, where did you get that from?). It's a poem about alcoholism, apparently.

Only three verbs - to drink, to live, to see.
And two nouns - wine and barrel

All Bs and Vs which are almost the same sound in Spanish

I wouldn't like to try and translate it tbh, pretty much impossible.
 

Benny B

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One of various possible bad 'literal' translations would be:

To live without drinking

To drink without living, when I drink I live? When I live I drink?
When I see the barrel, I drink wine, I live
 

Corpsey

bandz ahoy
The ... haiku, which was one of over 20,000 that he wrote during his lifetime, was composed following the death of his young daughter. In it, he refers to the popular Zen image of the dewdrop world, the reflection of reality. This image might give us cause to take refuge in the emptiness of things, ‘and yet,’ writes the grieving poet, and the suffering, deluded human; ‘and yet…’
 

woops

is not like other people
yes, i'm just being silly, it's like somethng one of those oulipo jokers might do
 

sufi

lala
I thought desire would kill me
and the one I love would never know.

Letter of mine, read out salaam
to my unnamed one,
tell them, dear letter:

“The hand who wrote me for you
its soul suffers in torment —
if you read me,
take pity on my writer,
have mercy,
and write back.”


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