LUKE DAVIS -- POEMS

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You can't just make stuff up @shakahislop

 

[Benny Bunter]

'Amorous marble' is a good way to start a poem. Does it refer to some sort of classical Roman statue? And the phrase sounds quite, dare I say it, erotic in the mouth, how you kind of enclose your lips around the words as you say them, but contrasted with the coldness and hardness of the marble. Sensual

Plus it kind of makes you think you might be embarking on some kind of modernist mini-epic (maybe projecting here cos I've been reading Pound and H.D. recently and I have them on the brain, but it's all part of the fun of reading poetry so who cares if I'm wrong?)

 

[Benny Bunter]

You can't just make stuff up @shakahislop

Maybe writers don't, but readers can make stuff up though (see above post and probably all the comments that follow from me)

Bit of Hopkins maybe in the second stanza, birdsong ascending at sharp angles, swift and sudden, pivoting into the maelstrom etc. Exciting, dynamic stuff - "the torque of cyclonic matter"

 

[Benny Bunter]

The images are hard, without frills, but they come thick and fast, lots of movement, dynamic snapshots, freewheeling.

Commence sequence -------------

Now we go into Prynnian breezeblocks, densely packed with memorable little phrases and surprising oddities ('Norwegia wool' - is that mangling the Beatles? - 'ambien synth setting' ((where's the T in 'ambient? And the N in 'Norwegian'? What is going on here???))

And that's just the first page.

 

[Benny Bunter]

In short, there's a lot going on here in a very short space

 

[luka]

Mine arrived today (thanks Sufi!) and I went straight to p23 but tbh it's hard to tell what the typo could be. Is it the word 'lasagne' itself that should be something else, or the perhaps the capitalised 'Porky' just after it? I mean, the whole thing looks mad as fuck anyway (in a good way)

Lasagne is passage

 

[luka]

Not potholing up that passage porky... It's got a simple rhythm And momentum

 

[luka]

Norwegia wool is the Beatles but it's also washing machine cycle wool and linen

 

[Benny Bunter]

So how did it turn into a lasagne then? AutoCorrect? I guess that fits into the concept of the poem maybe? (Predictive text)

 

[luka]

The washing machine preset is also synth preset (ambien)

 

[luka]

So how did it turn into a lasagne then? AutoCorrect? I guess that fits into the concept of the poem maybe? (Predictive text)

Yeah the poem is an autocorrect predictive text Poem

 

[luka]

The tablet is a stone tablet, an iPad and a pill

 

[Benny Bunter]

Biblical overtones too

 

[luka]

In case anyone is confused I'm a romantic and my vision of poetry is the more high you are the more more true it is

 

[luka]

To put it even more bluntly there is no problem in my poetry that can be solved by thinking. There is not problem that can't be solved by taking more drugs

 

[Benny Bunter]

No word of a lie my partner, who's English is terrible, just picked up the book and read a bit of the first page and said it was 'dinamica' - so there you go.

 

[luka]

The lessenglish you speak the more obviously good it is

 

[Benny Bunter]

She reckoned she could understand it

 

[luka]

She can, perfectly, only English speakers get confuse d. It's not hard

 

[Benny Bunter]

Yeah she seemed to get it straight away. Mad isn't it,? I was a bit gobsmacked cos I'd just said exactly the same on here half an hour earlier.